Published August 4, 2011
Maybe a look, perhaps a smile
That makes my heart sing and dance and wonder
What I did to deserve you.
You are the sparkle in my eyes,
the joy in my heart,
the love in my life,
and the song on my lips.
You make me feel
Special
Beautiful
and Loved
by you.
Can this be? Is this true...
this wonderful, breathtaking feeling that I get
every time you look at me?
Or are you just a dream,
and this life of mine just
a fantasy?
Nay, our love needs no explanation.
Our love needs no excuse,
no reason why we feel
the way we do.
It is pure, and carefree and beautiful.
And I can't help but admit that
you saved me.
I will always remember what
you told me.
"Every star in the sky is
a kiss from me
to you."
There's a lot of
stars in the sky,
my darling. <3
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Aw, very cute! I was smiling the whole time I read this.
^I've had a lot of a favorite lines from stories/poems I've read on this site, but this is BY FAR the best line. It's wonderful and is ... so great. Just by adding that line, this is my [italic]favorite[/italic] poem.
Brava! And the ending of this poem... gosh, I love it. I'm already a sucker for a good love story, and you really did a great job. Keep it up!
- JustMe
Aw.... Someone's in love ^^ XD
Haha, okay, back to your poem.
So cute! But, may I suggest a structure? Its amazing, no doubt, but a structure gives that professional look. Also, bold to italics. (As IcyFlame's mentioned.)
If somebody ever told me that, I'd never let go of them. I love that line!
Also, some places, you didn't put the puntuation marks. So you might want to check that.
Other than that, it was amazing. LOVEly ;D
Okay then,
Bye!
And keep it up!
-JT
This is a really nice poem!
The only thing I'd really change is to put the bold writing into italics instead. Somehow that just makes it seem more 'poemy'
Other than that, this was well written; short but sweet.
Keep writing!
I remember the poems I wrote last year because of a guy, by your work. I can really relate myself on your poem. Gosh, my heart is somewhat jumping again!
Thanks for your work. I do love it! 