Arrow here!
Given how short this is, I am not sure how much I have to say about it, but here we go!
I suggest adding a bit more detail to this, since the first three words are "There Rylan Castilla." Now, I am not saying ANYTHING bad about this, trust me. I suggest saying something like, "There he stood, Rylan Castilla," OR "There Rylan Castilla stood," and then add something about how the environment ties in with his physical features. Like compare the sun to his eyes, or the bark of trees to his fur. Spice it up a bit!
Anyway, this snippet was amazing, keep it up!
With pawfuls of love,
xArrows
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