Published January 4, 2011
Black numbers on pages before me,
Their meaning I could not see.
I sat for hours, numb to my knees,
Pencil idle in hand, searching for keys,
For solutions to the slippery equation.
But the figures, they danced and capered!
Misery and befuddlement they savored,
Taunting and jeering with their imprints,
Despite my efforts I found no hints,
Nothing but mounting trepidation.
Time flew by with unsurpassed speed,
Ignorantly deaf to my fervent pleads
While answers yet evaded me.
Oh, how badly I wanted to flee
From calamity consequential!
With a test in two days,
My nerves started to fray.
Frantically I sought for reprieve!
Impending doom I did perceive:
An “F” on the provincial.
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This is a piece I wrote several years ago which I recently rediscovered. Not my usual style, but it's rather fun so I thought I would see what people think... I fixed it up a little before posting. Any comments are very much appreciated, like always!
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I know how you feel! I can not stand Maths! This poem right here, story of my life! Somehow, every Maths class, anime ends up on my paper. Funny that.
Okay, here's my key...
Red - I have no clue what you're going on about!
Green - Good, I love it!
Underline - That doesn't need to be there!
Black numbers on pages before me,Their meaning I could not see.I sat for hours, numb to my knees,Pencil idle in hand, searching for keys,For solutions to the slippery equation.
But the figures, they danced and capered! Misery and befuddlement they savored,Taunting and jeering with their imprints,Despite my efforts I found no hints,Nothing but mounting trepidation.
Time flew by with unsurpassed speed,Ignorantly deaf to my fervent pleads While answers yet evaded me.Oh, how badly I wanted to flee From calamity consequential!
With a test in two days,My nerves started to fray.Frantically I sought for reprieve!Impending doom I did perceive:An “F” on the provincial.
Like I said earlier, really good! Funny, it was. And true! I'm not sure 'befuddlement' is a word, but I use my theasuraus, I'm no human dictionary... Loved it. keepa goin'!
I like this poem.
I like your rhyming scheme, although it changes in the last stanza where you have A/A/B/B/C instead of A/A/A/A/C. Anyway, I don't think there's much more to say here. Well structured and I like the fact that the last line always rhymes with the last line of the previous stanza.
Good job!
Keep writing!
this is cute and somewhat funny. i disliked math as a child, but now in college i'm taking up accountancy. haha. i love the words you used.