Published July 26, 2007
Saturdays I try not lose my head
I fall asleep before i can even reach my bed
Everyday I try to get something out of my life
But everyday's the same
I hanging out with you
[u]chorus
We can't share hearts we're falling apart
Couldn't we just take it slower
No need to rush
We're done with us
No need for another chance
Just let this go
And give us up
I guess some one
decided to cut the thread that sewed our heart
No need to blame them it was all because of us
We were temporary
We got into each others' ways
you know we couldn't last forever
(chorus)
I need a break
from all of this
I want a clean slate
I don't want to hurt you
but it was for our own sakes
so...
(chorus)
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I agree with dantheman. The emotion is there. YAY for showing and not telling (something I'm not very good at sometimes
)!!
i can see emotion in this
i like it
That's pretty good. Keep 'em coming! I would kind of clearify a few things, but that's just me!