When I first began reading your poem, I was really excited, and my expectations for the poem started to grow; however, as the piece progressed, I became frustrated with the lack of clarity in the plot. Of course, straightforward plot is not a requirement in poetry, but the frenzied structure of the plot confused me. I suggest that you revise the poem after the first sentence, and make the writing a bit more concise - "showing" more and "telling" less. And you should either capitalize "i" or make the reason why "i" isn't capitalized clearer to the reader because as of right now, it confuses me. Keep up the good work!
Points: 1046
Reviews: 9
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