Good work. I liked it, but there were some things that stopped the flow.
First, try putting more punctuation next time.
Second, you repeated the word 'Hell' around the last stanza. I know you're trying to rhyme to get a meaning, but it's better to avoid using the same word two or more times.
Overall, I think it was quite good. And remember, a poem doesn't always have to rhyme.
Keep up the good work!
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