Mmm...
It's interesting. I found the poem quite light and cheerful, with a lot of numerous to the song, especially "Let me take you down"...though the poem had a contradictory meaning to the Beatles's song.
Overall, it was fairly good. What I don't understand is your sometimes superfluous flow of lyrical lines. For example, "The golden chalice to all others dull
So sweet as to make mine tongue melt,
And as to make my soul burn
In the fiery confines of control. " is rather unnecessary, and only takes me away from the poem itself, draws my attention away.
Otherwise...nice job. What was the message though?
Strawberry Fields----One of the best songs ever...
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