what do you say?

by selenasacuna
  • November 27, 2007
  • Poetry
  • Lyrical

what do you say?


If someone asked you
what do you believe in?
what do you say?

You say:
I believe In everything and nothing
in god & Allah, in fairies & unicorns
in Buddha & Ra
in all of this and more.

If someone says “help”
what do you say?

You say:
what, do you need a buck or two?
A place to live for a time?
I’ll always be here to lend you a hand.

When you need some time away
what do you say?

You say:
leave me alone and let me be
I need some time and space
between you and me.

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Audy
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Audy wrote a review · Tue Nov 27, 2007 9:56 pm

I liked it, it's good! I'm no poetry expert, but I think the start of every line should be capitalized? I dunno for sure.



what do you need, a buck or two?


I think a comma should go there...or

what , do you need a buck or two?

Otherwise it's a bit confusing =)


Also 'God' should be capitalized, no? =)



"The trouble with Borrowing another mind was, you always felt out of place when you got back to your own body, and Granny was the first person ever to read the mind of a building. Now she was feeling big and gritty and full of passages. 'Are you all right?' Granny nodded, and opened her windows. She extended her east and west wings and tried to concentrate on the tiny cup held in her pillars."
— Terry Pratchett, Discworld: Equal Rites