the overwhelming, comforting aroma of freshly brewed coffee surrounds me, warms my still-wet fingertips.
the sizzle and pop of eggs frying on oil, followed by the gentle scraping of a fork scrambling them.
the splotch of soggy socks on the rain-splattered floor.
i smile.
im fixing breakfast with a friend, and im happy.
THIS is normal- there's no pressing claustrophobic need to escape, to do something, that usually accimpanies her presence.
for the first time in a while, i see that she's happy doing nothing....
and it surprises her
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This piece sounds nice. It has a light happy feel to it.
The one thing I noticed is there are a lot of lowercase letters that should be uppercase(the beginning of sentences, and anytime you say "I" the I should be capitalized). And that anytime you say "I'm" you forget the apostrophe.
The piece itself has a nice ring to it, and I like it. It would be much better with proper capitalization.
But it is still a nice piece.
Good job!!!