As I read your piece I had shiver down my spine, my heart raced and I had very clear images in my mind. I my self i have been victim of a similar crime that haunts me still. You clearly write from a place deep inside of you. That is where the best writing comes from. And clearly you have a way with words that I'm very jealous of and Im honoured to read your piece. I encourage you to keep right out of that deep place, you have the power to heal souls with truth never doubt that.
The way you started off beautifully and I could feel the sunshine dancing on my skin as you described the girl dancing, and then it hit me the darkness and I almost didn't want to read any further. And yet the whole poem has a kind soft songy flow to it. I imagine it being told by a girl staring out the window on a summers day staring at the pavement on which she once danced before in the past with an innocent heart. So it brings over a heavy feel of dark irony for me. Which makes my hair stand up on the back of my neck. So yes you created very strong imagery for me.
I'm sorry if this is a lousy review its my first havent done any of these efore, hope it makes sence.
Keep writing, and making the world a better place one word at a time.
the._.diarist
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