Heaven On Earth

Welcome to the world of XII- C..

Where all worries are kept at bay,
"Oh! What a great class!!" everyone says.

Under the guidance of Ragini Ma'am,
We form a very close knit clan.

We make mischief whenever we can,
Let's take a look at the members of our band.

NIPUN is the class Einstein,
JASLEEN, the all- rounder, always shines.
MANISHA's intelligence surpasses all,
INDERPAL is samrt and quite tall.

SURABHI, JASLEEN and VARDAN are the best of friends,
URVASHI's narrations never end.
KARAN has a permanent earnest look,
HARSHITA and ANKITA are always engrossed in books.

ANGAD causes trouble round the clock,
ANKIT is the incharge of the class's safety lock.
ROMITABH is the silent one,
UDAY always looks out for loads of fun.

ASHISH can imitate anybody's hand,
SAUMYA can join a musical rock band.
"What??" is the only question on SHIVANGI's lips,
MANJU has Hindi on her fingertips.

VIKRAM is the future M.F. Hussain,
HAPPY is always in a hurry like a train.
TRISHA toils hard day and night,
SHWETA and RITIKA have a cute little height.

RUBISHA is the monitor of the class,
NIPUN and ARPIT's friendship promises to last.
SHIVANI loves singing the blues,
HITHIKA and AKSHITA are the inseparable two.

ARCHANA and SUCHITRA are the new girls in town,
DIKSHA never ever frowns.
KUMAR and RANA have the same first names,
Cricket is MONTY's favourite game.

SUNITA and MANISHA sit together throughout,
Nobody's has ever heard RAVINDER or RAMAN scream or shout.
DINESH is a friendly guy,
GAYATRI is always ready with a cute and sweet "Hi!"

And I myself am best left undescribed,
because once I start, I'll go on for miles!!
But still I will mention my name, i.e. SALONI,
Dare you ever try to forget me.

So this is our Class XII-C,
Do drop in when you pass our way,
We're so good,we'll make you say:-
"Oh! What a cool class XII-C is!!"
:D :D

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salonikhera Comment

first of all, i am sorry for a late response to your review.
i appreciate your suggestions and the names are real! :)

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armstronge
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I think the topic this poem is about is a very creative one. I'm not to sure if the people you're describing actual people, just that their names are scrambled up.

First off, I think you shouldn't make the font color bright red. It was hard to read because the bright red color was just too bright. A darker color would be a lot friendlier.

salonikhera wrote:
And I myself am best left #BF40FF ">undescribed,
because once I start, I'll go on for #BF40FF ">miles!!
But still I will mention my name, i.e. #BF40FF ">SALONI,
Dare you ever try to forget #BF40FF ">me.

So this is our Class #8000FF ">XII-C,
Do drop in when you pass our #8000FF ">way,
We're so good,we'll make you #8000FF ">say:-
"Oh! What a cool class XII-C #8000FF ">is!!"


I noticed that through out the entire poem, there was an AABB rhyme scheme. Only the first line and the last two stanzas don't rhyme. Once you start a rhyme scheme, then you can't just start not rhyming in the last stanzas. The first line is fine, but you have to try to keep the AABB rhyme scheme. Rhyme is hard, but there are some sites that can get you words that rhyme with another one.

Other than the rhyming problem, your poem is great! :D



I would rather die of passion than of boredom.
— Émile Zola