Why do you treat me like I'm nothing?
Congeniality?
fake?
slut?
whore?
liar?
little bitch?
attention whore?
cunt?
lesbian
Why do you call me all these hateful words. I am me. I am bisexual and I am bigger than you make me seem. So fuck you and don't put yourself ahead of me!
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I agree with what the user below me said.
Lengthen this!
The parts you have here are good, but could be made sooooo much better if you expanded on them. Describe not just your reaction to these words (the bit at the end) but how those words make you feel. How did they make you get to the end where you yell at her?
Make it grow until you get to a point where the reader is like, "TELL HER OFF!" and then let it explode in what you think about what she said.
The last part where you are telling her off should also be in poetry form, rather than a paragraph. That's just my opinion, however. If you like it that way, keep it that way.
And I have to agree. No one on earth is higher than anyone else, we are all human.
You go Girl!!!
~Teen~
Okay, sensing a lot of hate and anger toward the people and towards you. I think you should take the emotions you feel and just word them a bit more instead of just saying the names and ending it with how you feel( which I liked that part a lot) tell the reader what has happened other than the names, Tell about the anger the speaker feel. I enjoyed the question in the beginning the, " Why do you treat me like im nothing" I think you can do So much with that one questions its unreal the possibilities you have. The power though in this poem I enjoy. I like how you can feel the raw emotion given off. Over all well done. just a few things to think about.
Keep it up, Fallen.
ok.
I see a lot of hate in this toward her. I think you need to lengthen it. put in like how these represent what she thinks of you. like lesbian for instance, short hair.
I think that with the right use of words you can make this poem stand out and you could put more power into it. power in this poem would be cool cuz it would see 100x more angerly