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A new chapter in life where everything calls for achievement. But my entire life changed when I entered this critical stage in life where everything should be systematic. Every child that comes from their mother’s womb achieving adolescence, and become an adult one. Teenage life is a chapter of our life where we teens should be ready in everything we do. There’s a lot of thing to define the teenage life now. A things that particularly not the same on the previous years. According to Pickhardt (Adolescence and the Marketplace Influence, 2013 p.1), teenagers considered the center of life that everything goes on that stage. It is the time of both disorientation and discovery. Every distraction that happens during teenage years is for us to be prepared for the future life. in others words teenagers distract in personal, interpersonal, and physiological.


The one of the distraction of the teenagers is on personal that ruin their life. and it affect their way of living. When we figure out the role of everything in our lives. We can found out the positive and the negative things that can affect on us. This makes us learn to do whatever we want. But in other people see it a negative one. But as a teenager now we can decide and choose our own way of accomplishing everything. But it also affects our relationship to our parents because they saw it as a negative one. That results of mistrust. The term is usually applied when they are feeling frustrated, impatient, or critical with the teenager, which only makes insulting injury from this name-calling harder to bear.

-Pickhardt (When Parents Call Their Adolescent "Lazy", 2013 p. 1). The problem here is that it’s not just the aggrieved parent who is making this comparison.


The next one is distraction in interpersonal.A teenager now drives their own lives. As the time past we can’t imagine what is the idea that comes to the mind of the teenagers. The most interpersonal distraction is because of friends. It is the time that you learn the different extraordinary things that your parents didn't taught to you. As a teenager it is fun. But the problem is it catches up all the attentions and time that affect for the activity or things that you need to do.


The last one is the physiological distraction.Most of the teenagers now involves in the girl and boy relationships. That ends up in some mistakes and faults. We will also have a thousand and one questions as we enter this new stage of life. This is the time when we actually need the guidance and support of our parents and older people. And a wide knowledge of understandings to realize what is right and wrong before you do something so that you can’t ends up to unwanted results. “about the only real freedom I have now is dealing with any troubles I get myself into.”

–Carl E. Pickhardt (Adolescence and the Myth of Independence, 2012 p.1).


Teenagers is considered the middle stage and the stage of a new beginning. To start or own lives and to ruin our own destiny. That is full of disillusionment. Beliefs one develops or are taught become sources of great disappointment, even betrayal, when they turn out not to be true. A new chapter in life where everything calls for desperate measures. we can’t imagine the things growing in our skins as we go through this stage in life.

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KnightTeen
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Hey, Knight Teen of the Green Room Knights here to provide you with a review!


A new chapter in life where everything calls for achievement. But my entire life changed when I entered this critical stage in life where everything should be systematic.


You speak of a stage and yet you do not address what that stage is. Yes, we all know what you are talking about, but you really need to include your topic in the opening sentence or the sentence after it.

The one of the distraction of the teenagers is on personal that ruin their life. and it affect their way of living.


For the life of me I cannot understand your meaning here.


I noticed that in two of your topic paragraphs you said, "the next one, the last one,". Such words are to be avoided in introduction sentences.

I thought that you presented your topic and proved your point quite eloquently, and that aside from a few minor blurbs, you wrote this very well. I do not assume that I know everything about being a teenager, even though I am one, and you opened my eyes to yet another aspect of our rather complicated lives.

KT

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The Messenger Knight here to review for KotGR.
So, I saw no problems up to this point:

The one of the distraction of the teenagers is on personal that ruin their life. and it affect their way of living.

This line threw me off, because I really don't know what it means. Perhaps a re-phrase job would be in order.
Also, two lines after that you have the word "found" and it should be find.

That results of mistrust.

Of should be in.
.A teenager now drives their own lives.

Should be his/her instead of their, and therefor you can take the s off of lives.
Teenagers is considered the middle stage and the stage of a new beginning.

Switch is to are.
Overall pretty well done. One resource I would suggest reading it called "Just do something" by two men called the Harrison's.

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miajaneboo Comment

i like your essay,


From start to finish you hold on to your topic...

Keep it up!

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Chairazell Comment

Nice work. Keep it up :)

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khrisnacomia Comment

Nice essay but avoid putting too much punctuations. Also the reference you use.



I always like to look on the optimistic side of life, but I am realistic enough to know that life is a complex matter.
— Walt Disney