But that’s just the life I’m living right now. Usually my life is pretty busy. I mean with all the traveling and “helping” people, I don’t normally have time to myself. Not that I’m complaining. The girls in my classes think that I don’t have a life. With karate, wrestling, boxing, target shooting, hunting, tracking, rebuilding electronics, fixing car engines etc. my life is full. I have a life, yes it’s very different but I have a life. The way I see it, is the girls in my classes don’t have lives. All they seem to worry about is boys, and how they look, or if their ass looks great in the new pair of jeans they just bought. Puh-leeeez!! That not a life, in my opinion anyway. Boys are only good for their huge egos and their mind set. See, my two brothers Matt and Dean both think that they are invincible (ego/mind set) and will charge into anything with out using the gray matter in between their ears first. Really I think god wasted two very good brains and gave them away to nut cases. But that’s beside the point. Andy and I are more like our dad. Dad seems to take more pride in the two of us then Matt or Dean. I wonder if at has anything to do with the 98 average. Meh, who knows? Dad was 19 when he joined the army. He was move to a Special Forces team before he was 20. See, my granddad was an international spy for the government. He also was on a Special Forces team and the air force. Granddad was a very talented man. Dad wanted to be like his dad for as long as he can remember. And anyway, like me he really didn’t have a choice in life. He had the Hodson legacy to fill. Well that what he told me at least. Like granddad, dad became an international spy, and was put on the same Special Forces team that granddad was on. Dad is one of the best.
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Good work yet again but there are a few things =
here you just jump from school to dad, it is OK but it's a bit sudden, you could also just add something like "my" in front of "dad in the second sentence
Here you could just change the place of the sentences in this way
See, Granddad was a very talented man. my granddad was an international spy for the government. He also was on a Special Forces team and the air force.
In this way
also
this is essentially OK but you might want to change it so that when your speaking about the grandfather you also write there grandfather instead of dad's dad.