Hi Rhea, I'll be reviewing your work.
The first thing that I noticed is how you used a semi-colon in place for a colon. The semicolon (;) has only one major use. It is used to join two complete sentences into a single written sentence.
"I really dont want to see Corahn today . Defintly because he had been hitting me lately . I wonder what has gotten into him ! I have really been trying to avoid him . But now i have to see him !"
^I see quite a few spelling and grammatical errors here. For example: "defintly" instead of definitely. Also, the sentences don't seem to flow very well.
"You went into the bathroom and did you hygiene . You put on some hollister jeans , a red shirt , and some red jordans . Then you curled your hair and straighted you bang but put it to the side . You went downstairs to eat breakfast."
^"Did you hygiene"? Really? Stop for a minute and consider what you just wrote. Does it make sense? Also, you seem to be substituting "you" for "your". Nononono. Again, many grammatical and spelling mistakes here.
I recommend that the next time you write something, read it out loud afterwards. You'll be surprised at how many mistakes you've made that they hasn't caught. Overall, I found this very amusing. You just really need to work on your punctuation, grammar and spelling.
Hope this helped
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