I was mesmerized to the idea of having a big brother. Maybe because I never met mine sooner if only he lived longer.
Growing up, I’ve always wanted to watch series and dramas where the leading man has a younger sister, or the second lead was a gangster and does have a younger sister, and maybe the leading woman has an older brother. I always look up to their roles as big brothers to their siblings only to dream of having a brother more.
I was the eldest daughter. The eldest cousin. The eldest child in our family so growing up having the responsibility to take care of my younger sisters, to protect them, and to look after them made me think I am the big brother I’ve always wanted.
I think you’re wondering why I prefer having a big brother rather than a sister. Well maybe because I already have one and I’ve already spent my days with her as she and I have something in common. And having a brother hits different.
As much as I take care of my siblings, I wanna be protected too. As much as I treat my siblings, I wanna get treated too. As much as I tease them, I wanna get teased too. As much as I defend them to their own bullies, I wanna get defended too.
As much as I act manly and strong towards my younger siblings, I wanna get acted upon too.
I don’t think people will understand my point but trust me, having a big brother is so fvcking cool!! Imagine getting treated, even being fetched to school, beating up your bullies, protects you at all cost basically because you have a brother.
If only my Kuya Joseph have lived longer, I would have also experience everything I’ve wanted to feel. To be honest, just the feeling and pride that you have someone to call a “Kuya” gives me so much joy.
To all ppl who have a big brother that carries all the responsibility of protecting you, you’re living with somebody’s dream. Take care of them. Because just like us, the eldest, they needed be loved as well. :))
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I really loved your article and can really understand where you are coming from. I have an older sibling and can see the pressure put on them daily. I like how you explained your emotion in such a way that I can feel what you are feeling too. This article is kind of poetic in a way, I just wanted to note that. I liked the bits of your culture added into this article like "just the feeling and pride that you have someone to call a “Kuya” gives me so much joy". This really gives your audience an insight on your culture/heritage. In my culture I also call my older sibling by a different title "Didi". Overall I really like your writing style, I am looking forward to reading more content written by you!
Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),
Hi! I'm Kate and I'm here to leave a quick review!!
First Impression
I think this was quite a lovely article here. It does a wonderful job bringing across the feelings you have on a big brother and wanting one and why. It feels a little more personal than an article perhaps so maybe it should be more of a reflective piece but it certainly is quite an enjoyable read.
Anyway let's get right to: Kate's Line by Line Reactions;
Oooh given the article I was expecting big brother to more along the lines of terrifying AI idea but this gets off to a much more sobering and simple reality of wanting a big brother and not being able to have one.
Well that's quite a lovely little set of thoughts there on how we can still feel holes in our life. I will say this style of writing here is slowly taking it into a place a bit too informal for an article. It still makes for an amazing reflective piece but I just wanted to note that.
Hmm this is somewhat of a relatable idea for me being an only child, to not really have someone to rely on and being the eldest in a family where having to be the elder one to your younger siblings on top certainly would only increase that desire.
Well that's a bittersweet message to end on. A beautiful note for the one you've lost and reminder to everyone else to protect and appreciate the wonderful things that you already have.
Aaand that's it for this oneee!!!
Overall
Overall I think a wonderful little piece that touches all our hearts and gives out a wonderful message to all of us about taking care of our siblings and appreciating the things we have.
As always remember to: Take what you think was helpful and forget the rest!
Kate
Hello! Ley here to review this awesome piece for you! I'm using my fantasy themed review method today. I hope this review helps in more ways than one. Let's get into it!
A Journey Begins:
So I see here we have a narrative about why having a big brother is better than having a big sister (in your eyes). Being as I'm an older sister to a younger brother, I can see why this could be an argument. I always wished I had an older brother to take care of me, but I don't, so I feel like it's up to me to watch over him rather than being the one watched over. Let's get into the details of this awesome work~
Glimmers in The Gloom:
I really enjoyed this point you had here:
I really related to this paragraph. I feel like it's a human need to want to be protected, and I can totally see how having an older brother would be just the thing to do it. <3
Even though this line does come off a bit stereotypical, I can respect it. Being as that's the status quo when it comes to big brothers, I actually kind of liked this point. It shows that the nature of having older siblings is simply to 'protect', which I hope would be the case!
Magic Upgrades:
Now for my recommendations! There aren't many, as this is a rather short piece:
This paragraph read a bit confusing to me. Maybe it was the word 'does'? I'm not sure if you meant to say 'doesn't', and if you didn't, I'd recommend taking out that word all together. It kind of halts the flow of this narrative, but that's just my recommendation!
I also noticed that towards the end of the narrative, you start talking in abbreviations. Which is fine, if that's what you're aiming for, but since the beginning of the narrative doesn't match-- I'd recommend actually typing the words out. For example, you said 'Ppl' instead of 'people', and I feel like it was a bit out of place.
The Final Enchantment:
Overall, this was an insightful read. Thank you for sharing, and I hope to read more work of yours in the future!
Thank you for taking time to read this review! I hope you have a lovely day <3
Aw, I have never thought of all of those who don't have older siblings, mostly because I am the middle child, but I can see where you are coming from. Great work!~