Published December 10, 2010
Dear heart,
This is for the boy whom I call my heart.
Because that is exactly what he holds.
Dear mind,
This is for my friends and teachers.
I call all of you my mind because that is what you have helped me develop.
Dear body,
This is for my parents.
For giving me life and for letting me live.
Dear dreams,
This is for my writing for it is what my dreams consist of.
It gives me the freedom to express my self.
Dear fear,
This is for my father.
For all the hurt and wrong he has engraved into my mind.
Dear hate,
This is for the horrid names that were spit at my brother through clenched teeth.
This is for his tears.
That made him stronger.
Dear love,
This is for my family.
For supporting me.
For understanding.
Dear hope,
This is for the heavens.
For our savior.
The only one that fills my heart.
Last but not least,
Dear me,
This is for you.
For you have changed everything.
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I love this!
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It kind of reminds me of a song, actually...
I think it's very creative and different.
Be proud!
I liked this- it was original, and it was simple, and it was very well done.
(I'm going to do a really short review, if you don't mind too terribly.)
I would try to create a consistent stanza length, especially in the "Dear hate" stanza- try combing the last two lines and I think it would be stronger.
Overall, nice piece.
-Coral-