Life

Hi there Ray. I'm here to review... or something like that.

Okay, truth is that I like the subject of your poem, it's a beautiful message. But everytime I read it I feel like you forced it to rhyme. o.0 You don't always have to make a poem rhyme, it just have to flow. Feel free to express yourself, sometimes wanting to rhyme changes what you really want to say. That's just an advice, I don't know. Also, this poem is just one sentence?

rayofhope wrote:It's just the start,

Add an apostrophe.

I think you have talent, and that you can make something big. So keep on writing! Never give up! Good job!

I don't know why but I like reviewing poetry, even though I never can write a good poem. Out of all the poetry I've reviewed this is one of my favorites.
1)I enjoyed yoour ryhmes above all else, because they gave the poem a nice flow.
2) I agree with Boo here this line

Precious than a treasure cove

should begin with more or it could be written as the following : As precious as a treasure cove.
Nice poem.

Boo here!

You win some,
You lose some,
Don't take it to heart,
Its just the start,
Life is tough,
Worse than a cough,
Not at all easy,
Might make you feel quesy,Should be queasy
But then there is love,
Precious than a treasure cove, Eather needs to be More precious or As precious.
The beauty of life,
Is worth the strife,
Face worries with hope,
Gradually,you will learn to cope.

You have a skeleton of a poem here. Some lines seem like you actually had an idea to write on, and the next is like you forced the rhyme. You just forced the rhyme a lot and it ruined your poem. You need to work a lot on this. Nice try!

PM me if you have any questions!

-Boo