Chicken Scratch

Who?

What?

When?

Where?

Oh! What horrid handwriting

Minds are befuddled

Eyes are all muddled

Squiggles

Wiggles

Incoherent angles

Non-existent shapes

That not even the brightest minds dare to decipher

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I love it, i find your comparisons just divine and i definately find your written talent the best. thank you for bringing this collection of words into my life :) xx yeah sigh

Like perdido said, this poem is just kind of mediocre. I do however have some nitpicks to point out, and some things I liked a lot.

rasheedaBoo wrote:Who?

What?

When?

Where?


I didn't feel like those question words were really essential to the poem and what you were trying to talk about. It confuses the reader a little bit.

rasheedaBoo wrote:Squiggles

Wiggles

Incoherent angles

Non-existent shapes


I really liked these lines because they help you picture what this handwriting looks like.....plus I love the words squiggles and wiggles (hehehe :D ).

An interesting poem, I hope to read more of your work! :elephant:
-Jane!

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perdido wrote a review · Sat Apr 24, 2010 5:04 pm

This is okay. I mean what you've done here is novel, but it just isn't that interesting. I think you'd need some more... like why does this matter. Whose handwriting is it? Maybe more specific details. Why is it important that it is deciphered. Maybe you are frustrated by it, so express more frustration. Sorry for the crash review but I hope it helped at least a little.



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