I love this piece because you have described vividly how consciousness and shock and instinct can not only be the difference between life and death, but can tell the truth about yourself and lead you to grow and be aware.
'you lose your stock photo world as it turns to chaos under a black sun' I absolutely loved this line because it's true, our world, in our eyes, can only be one way or another. I also love the imagery in it.
'and make space for opinions and thoughts that once only existed in the unconscious.' I really liked this line, but perhaps you could change the end to make it flow more or maybe you could add some more imagery here describing this state of unconsciousness: only existed in the unconscious void of...
But that's completely up to you.
Enjoyed reading this poetry.
Points: 83
Reviews: 110
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