Today is Sunday,
The rain keeps falling
and I am writing
there is my love song
and I will sing it
only for you, oh baby------ (I don’t really like this part, I need help)
My love
I love to be with you
because you make me fly
Maybe tomorrow
will be my sorrow
nothing more that just a game
when I’ll see your face
And I’ll be happy,
I’ll be so happy
’Cos when I’m with you
I feel like somebody
My love
I love to be with you
because you make me fly
my love
I love to be with you
because you make me fly
Juarez/Quezada©
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Yes it looks like maroon 5 lol
I guess I’ll change it for Friday or I don’t know, is too short because is all about the music, i'm trying to explain miself with tabs and music, i want to put some violin and piano.
after you make me fly is music, then start the singing again. was just a weird idea, when the band plays that i will let you know, or find it on youtube
It is a pretty nice song but I think it is too short. Maybe you need to write a little more about the romance and describe about why and where you want to fly. Set you emotions free! Also I think you need to add a little bit more rhyming. But anyways your song was pretty good.
It's a really sweet (rock?) ballad.
That sounds like the first verse in "Sunday Morning" by Marron 5. Just pointing it out incase.
For that part you don't like
You could change it to something like
for you,
my true.
Or somrthing like that. I just came up with it off the top of my head so it probably won't flow. All in all it was a nice song.
Kay