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Where I Can Find You?
I will be so happy
if I could have you
here by my side
My soul wants to love,
and my heart is worried,
I’m feeling so lonely.
Love, oh, where I can find?
Where I can find you?
Are you too close from me?
Or very far away from here
Oh, no, my sweet love
Did I get here too late?
Did you’ve been waiting for me?
My thoughts are flying high,
and I don’t know why
I’m feeling alone tonight
If you’re here take my hand,
put me off of my sorrow
I’ll be stronger tomorrow
Love, oh, where I can find?
Where I can find you?
Are you too close from me?
Or very far away from here
Oh, no, my sweet love
Did I get here too late?
Did you’ve been waiting for me?
I have a map too you’re heart
But I think its al wrong
I don’t have what I need
Cos' all I want is you here
Love, oh, where I can find?
Where I can find you?
Are you too close from me?
Or very far away from here
Oh, no, my sweet love
Did I get here too late?
Did you’ve been waiting for me?
Siu/Quezada
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Hola again! I read this song twice and I really liked it although I would like for some more rhymes but that is okay. The only thing I think you need to change would be:
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Oh, no, my sweet love
Did I get here too late?
Did you’ve been waiting for me?-----------It should say HAVE YOU'VE BEEN WAITING FOR ME?
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But good job I like the emotions you showed in this song I will give you a star!