I wasn't sure where to post this, so I'm posting it here. I found out yesterday that someone really important to me was killed in a house fire. I wrote this for her. I'm not sure how good it is, but it comes from the heart.
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Thanks you guys, I really appreciate the reviews and kind words.
Hi there. Lavvi in to review.
I'm so sorry for your loss. The poem is quite touching. I love how it flows, the rhythm is rather almost perfect. Your words are great for the type of poem, articulate, but not entirely confusing.
The rainbow metaphor that you used was, frankly, quite lovely. And the way you changed it to the rays of her life was glorious. Really, really nice.
I don't want to slam this, really, because it's much like an ode to someone's life cut short.
Best wishes,
Lavvi
Hi, Sakin here. For one, this made me cry, just getting that out there. This is sad, but it shows your emotions about what happened to your friend. I think it's sweet that you would write this and that you feel that way about your friend. She's in a better place now, and you've shown that you understand that. I'm so sorry about your friend, but you are an amazing writer. Keep it up, and remember, she'll always be watching you from heaven.
~Forsakinshadow~