Young Writers Society

Hi, ZeldaIsShiek here to review your poetry and put a stop to the wicked Werewolves' plans! May the Witches rein supreme! I am also here to critique your work to make you and your writing better as a result. I am really excited to review this one. Ready? Let's begin.

I really liked reading this poem because I can relate to it very much. I feel down sometimes, but when I do, music always helps me feel better. It is very important for me to listen to music when I am sad or feel lonely, because it makes me feel safe when there is no where I can feel accepted. This poem is very special to me for that reason, and I feel like it was written with the intention of expressing how important music is in your life, especially when you are depressed or someone has you down. That's why I really love this poem!

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Hi popsicles! Saru here for a hopefully helpful review!
I'm going to get constructive criticism out of the way first so we can get on with what was great about this.

With music on, I feel good,

That can change the mood,

If we had a little misunderstood,

All I need is you my dear,

To a place, where all is better.

*Waves* HoI there, KaiRyu here for a hopefully not terrible review!

This poem has a great concept and expresses a musical person's needs for music quite well, but I feel like it doesn't have a good flow. Now, whenever I read a poem, I sing it out loud, and if I can sing it with a little bit of success then it's good! I could not find the beat to this poem, and that honestly distracted me from what the poem is all about. This is all that I could find wrong with the poem, and over all it was pretty good!

I especially liked the stanzas "Music is a beautiful escape ,From the reality I live in," because I feel like it's very truthful, and helps a bit to get the point of the poem across.

*Tries to think of something else.* Whelp, this is all I have for now! Just be clearer with the meanings, and find a fitting rhythm/ beat. Be bold, be daring, and keep up the great work! ^-^

Hello, E.E for a possibly quick review and maybe some utter nonsense! Grim is here as well, drinking hot cocoa and being a slacker. *Grim looks over, glaring* So, lets get started.

So, first thing I notice is that a lot of places need commas. "With good music in my ears", "I dream of a life with you" and "Music is a beautiful escape " all need commas after one another. Otherwise I noticed no other grammar or spelling mistakes. The flow was great as well, so no device there.

Now is when I dissect your poem and see if I can't get its meaning right! So, in your poem you are talking about how when you listen to music, all horrible thoughts that once plagued your mind just all disappear in swift motion of putting a small device in your ears. Every little explanation thing just venomous with out a second thought. You think of a person that you wish to spend the rest of you venomous with but could never achieve. OS music is how you escape the bad things. It connects with you on a level so deep. Music is emotions. There is no other explanation.

Otherwise, I liked the poem and keep up the good work! Happy Halloween! I need to go now, Grim has some more dead to reap and I ran out of cocoa for him.

Hello popsicles, BrEe, I really like your poem here it seems spontaneous and natural and of course unpretentious. The poem has a nice flow to it, nice rhyming scheme. That being said the theme of this poem is quite general and dare I say a bit mundane. This piece is nice but it could be excellent, it has no "wow" factor in it yet it has the potential to achieve it you just need to dig a little deeper, into your own consciousness, subconscious mind to achieve the level of brilliance that a poem on music deserves. All the best for your writing.

The poem is for all the music lovers. It is true that listening music makes you stress and fear free. You can do your work more conveniently. New and creative ideas come into your mind. As by listening music your mind is fresh. Everything is going your way.

This poem is really something that everyone can relate to, and that’s definitely great. I myself am a person who loves listening to music. The structure of the poem was great. It was short and to the point, without getting too off topic. This was wonderful and I hope to come across another one of your poems, keep up the good work!

I like the concepts that the poem involves. The effect of music can definitely be modulated by how our life is going at the moment we are listening to it. Thanks for sharing those deep thoughts. I'm going to write your thoughts in free verse. Please let me know if I understood your poem right.


Good music
Cancels my fears
Increases thought’s flow
Infuses life with meaning.

Yet without you
that same music would be meaningless.
But because of you it rings true.

Hi, popsicles! Raven here with a review!
So I get what this poem is trying to get across because I happen to be a music addict too. The only problem is that it's a little hard to follow. The rhyme scheme is the only thing that makes much sense, and some of the lines are just barely understandable.

"Music is real, because it is not fake" That line is a bit forced. It's obvious to the reader that music is real because it's not fake; that doesn't necessarily need to be spelled out.

"One big like for those/Who can make music I suppose/Because without music there's no/Life..." This set is a bit hard to understand because it makes it sound like you're indifferent or uncertain about why you like the people who make music.

"Without you, music would be a mistake" I don't understand this line at all. Why would it be a mistake?

Try to make things clearer or more poetic when working on odes or things might get confusing. Spend a good long time on each line. Ask yourself, "Does this make sense to other people?" I love your idea, but I think some editing might be in order.
Thanks for listening and happy writing!
--RavenLord