Well overall I really like your poem. At the begininng the rhyming starts off very well and it flows very nicely. The rhymes fit in well with the way you are going with the poem. At the end however, I thought the ryhming got very forced and unnecessary rhmyes and lines were put in. Overall I thought in was a very good poem I would just look over and revise the last few lines.
Points: 890
Reviews: 4
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