White Snow

Hi! This is quite a nice poem.
Overall: You write some very pretty images in very short lines, so they're almost like fleeting implications. Which I really like! I do wish that you had included something less conventional about this girl's beauty. The words you use evoke a pretty classical view of physical beauty; grace, delicacy, nice skin and hair. I like the way you use those images, but I would also like to know what sets her apart from them.
Title: I like it. It's like a reversal of Snow White, which is cool because that's a folktale about a beautiful girl. So using the same words kind of calls up the image of Snow White, but switching them sets apart your subject with the fairytale.
Stanza 1: Great! I like the sand simile, it's quite unconventional, but effective. xD Which is of course, the best kind. I'm not a huge fan of the "more than I can stand" but it's alright.
Stanza 2: My favorite. I like how the narrator admits that his perception/description of the girl is faulty, and the last line was unexpected. I like it.
Stanza 3: It's good that you change the first line here from the first line of the poem. I like the bird simile to show her delicacy, but "I won't let go" reads kind of awkwardly. The same goes for "for this reason, I was born".
Stanza 4: I love the first line. The second is alright, but a little confusing, because does it imply that the narrator only sees her beauty during those times? I also love the third, it's a strong image from so few words, and a beautiful one. And the last ties it together nicely.

Hey Phantom!

That's a nice poem you've got here. ^^ It's kind of different, comparing a girl to snow. The only weird thing was that, you called the poem "WHITE snow". The thing is, when you say "snow", it already appears white in the image the reader thinks. Which is what made it more confusing, but never mind! =)

Now, let's first move onto the formatting of the poem since, I'm supposed to be reviewing the poem in publishing basis. What was wrong is that, you don't really have to capitalize every letter of a new line. Its not really necessary. I know, in textbooks and all, it comes like that but it is mainly because of the program they print through or something of that sort. But since, I see no punctuation (i.e; comma's or full-stops), it's okay.

Secondly, on to the nitpicks. What I felt is that, I think you kind of lacked some flow there. Sometimes, its smooth but in the middle, it's like a break and then again it comes back. But I like how you made the stanza's number of lines even. 4 in the first, 5 in the followed by stanza and again 4 at the last! ^^ Though, I think it would be nice if you would have rhymed the whole thing together instead of tiny bits there and here.

Now here:

phantomwriterjoe wrote:I know a girl, pure as white snow
She's delicate like a bird I won't let go
She's a rose with prickling thorns
To love her
For this reason, I was born

Beautiful, amazing poem, Phantom. I love it!
My favorite thing about this poem is the image it forms in my mind.
When I read this, I see snow gathering around, forming, a girl. It's just what I see, it's most likely everyone sees it different.

Also, when you mention you see a girl pure what as snow, I think of a person with only good in there soul. Referencing that her soul is pure white as snow.

Even now and then, she stops to take a breath.
Those few moments I see her beauty,
I see a girl with the grace of a doe
I see a girl, pure white as snow.