I hope this is the right category. Its only a few paragraphs but I'm not sure if I'll keep writing it.
I'm what they call "unstable". My mind works perfectly, but in ways not even the most insane person could think of. They have only found four other children like me, and have locked all of us up. For if we were unleashed we would be the end of this world. Of Earth as we know it.
They, being the Staff, have kept me locked up since I was nine. To stop the fires and everything else me and my unstable mind caused. The others know what I did as I know what they caused but we never speak of it. We follow the Code which was put together buy Joseph Thorn, the only one of us to ever reach adulthood.
The rules of the Code are to be followed so we will be ready for the revelation Joseph has planned. It allows our potential to build. If that happens no one can stop us.
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Hiya Peanut. This is short, but I think I know where you got this from. Don't make it too much like Push, okay? It was a bad enough movie.
Perfectly? How does a perfect mind work? That sentence just bugs me. Consider re-writing it, please. You can take that sentence in a lot of different meanings.
Don't forget that comma!
With the idea, keep on writing it please. I want to see more what it is about.
But remember what I said: Don't make it too much like that movie.
EDIT: Oh yeah....just noticed something I should have earlier.
*cough cough* That's why we need to pay attention during English.