It's a pretty good poem. The punctuation is good (something some people tend to leave out when posting here).
First verse is very nice, repetition of "The" at the start of the sentence is good for creating a flow and setting a scene.
"vulture" in the second stanza conjured a rather vivid picture, with very few words and that's always good.
But it will not,
We will sing in the streets,
Sing of our freedom,
Of our hopes and dreams.
Nice and short, to the point and direct. The sentence structure also helps to convey this.
"Better to experience the poverty of freedom,
Than the decorated yoke of slavery. "
Nice word choice here, poverty of freedom and yoke of slavery is really well thought out change.
Harlem has things that we love,
So let's look to the here and now,
Its 1925 so let's focus on 1925.
Not really sure about the final line here, it's a rather dull ending to a poem which seemed to set up for so much more.
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