
Midding
Drawn to the fire like a moth, though the burn of the wisps don’t hurt, instead they engrave the memories of our hours. Spent talking, laughing, crying, enjoying the fresh breeze. You are outlined by the sun, with a gold lining as if god himself touched you and presented you to Earth. For you, the angels weep, as they wish they could take you back in their arms. God's favorite, the skies fortune, the stars gateway. Your body hones achilles physique, your beauty blessed by Athena, and your eyes glimmer like the crystals in the dark. To be in thy presence is exalting, an honor no other could receive. To be chosen by one of such caliber, feels as if this is all a dream and to awake would be to beg for death and fear.
And the flowers washed your face, the gold shimmered on your hands. The stare of envy that you’d get, swallowed by their sinister lies. You are the canvas that gods paint each night. You are the moon that we so like, and every night the stars all shine and they can see the space collide. Inside those arms what do they hide? Your name sticks out like a hanging sign, to speak it would raise an eye. Yet they’d speak it more than once, it was such a delight. To escape the body, breath, free will–won’t you join it for the night? The gleaming feeling of overwhelming lights. Thralled by the touch, could you stay a while? Track the lines on your face, how many places have tired the soul of the fire. You, crafted in the coal and pyro, bathed in the finest rain, clung to by only the greatest silk to ever raise. How could one, one of such adonis, fall into the great abyss. Maybe you were the reason that they stayed, to wait and come and say: We love your smile, your worn attire! Raise your fist and fight for fire! For Gods have walked all over your soul and body, for monsoons have builded you for eternity.
Carry the sky. The atmosphere, with pride you carry it, the air, humidity. The monsoons, the fungus and decay that aromatizes the surroundings with a toxicity so sweet. You carry gravity. The molecules, the grains of sand that waves wash over, slowly carving and grading you into an opal, crescent moon. Oh dear, my love, my pride. The joy of violins singing in the night, let the milky light caress your thighs, collapse. Fall into my arms and reside, as for once you’ve made a home inside of mine. Shooting stars onto my skin, starstruck to think that you are all mine. Is it true? Can I call you mine? Put your head in my hands, a sanctuary just for you, even when the days grow cold, you can nestle into the palms. To cherish you would be a privilege, bestowed by only gods. You sound like droplets in the caves, the echoing of bells inside a church, the wings of birds on summer afternoons. It’s you. You are the light that passes through the blinds, the fresh flowers outside, the sparkling lights at night. A euphonious chime to the falling leaves, an elixir of eloquence. Almost lyrical, the tears out of eyes, to submerge into your soul, feels like a dream.
Hold your hand out to the stars, let yourself stretch. Nothing can replace your light. The melodies of quiet summer nights, the aux cord of a car, a rooftop over sunset. To me you're more beautiful than all these things, to me, you’re more than just a summer song. Run through fields of flowers, play around the woods, lose yourself in the wind. And anything can end, but can you and me, forever be meant? Binded by eternity? Resemblance of a chiseled model, yet simmered to the soft, hardened texture of a structure. Not weakened, endurance of a dozen poses, excruciating in the arms of those who’ve fed more than had eaten. Let the crafter prick a needle. Let the sun embrace you warmly, let yourself find peace and comfort to the sound of wind and ice. You’re an unforgotten memory, a glimpse into a butterfly, the architecture of an empire, the sound of crickets in the night. Head on your shoulder, talk till the tears come out. You’re just a boy, so much for growing.
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Hello oirichu! Genevieve here to leave a quick review on your work in honor of Review Month!
Wow, at first glance, I've never seen a poem in the format of almost an essay of lines. I've seen prose poetry, but never like this, and it's very interesting yet fitting for the content of the poem. While reading this poem, it's so easy to become drawn and even encapsulated by the imagery and the weight of the emotion behind each line, image, and decision made in this work! Each sentence fragment doesn't leave the statement unfinished but is pungent in imagery. So I just want to commemorate you on all of that.
The overall tone of this poem is very romantic, which is shown through your word choices of
These are just a few examples of the beautiful lines you have packed in this one piece. The narrator is very much worshiping this subject, it reads like a dream; as if the narrator is just overflowing on all the majesty of this person. These lines, these words, are truly beautiful. It is clear these word choices were meticulously and intentionally chosen, which overall makes the dream-like, romantic tone even stronger.
Truthfully, I have little to no suggestions to add to this poem. This is a wonderful piece of work and I'm glad to have read it and reviewed it! Thank you for posting this and I hope you continue to write and post. Hope to read more of your work soon! God bless ♡
<3 Thank you so much Genevieve for such a flowy and sweet review!! Always a joy to know that the way I write though a little out of conventional norms still brings upon the wave of emotions from within the words. Thank you for taking your time to leave this review, continue shining!!
Hi!
I’m not sure what to label this. Poetry? An excerpt of some kind? But whatever it is, it’s honestly amazing. Everything about this, from the language to the images it forces you to imagine is just spot-on, super well-written. I like that you included an image as a way to show off a more fitting font. I was admittedly a little confused that the whole thing repeated itself in the standard format, but I’m guessing that’s in case the image doesn’t load? Smart.
I really have no complaints here. Even though it feels like it doesn’t fit into a broader genre, I think it’s nice. Awesome through and through. Lines like “A euphonious chime to the falling leaves, an elixir of eloquence. Almost lyrical, the tears out of eyes, to submerge into your soul, feels like a dream.” That was epic. Cinema.
I’d give this a 10/10. Very nice 👍🏻
:') It's always thrilling to know my way of boundless writing comes across as beautiful to others, thank you for such a kind review!! This was amazing, pure cinema <3
i genuinely have no words to just describe how i feel. god the intimacy is just so insane. this is just so, genuinely beautiful. these feelings, the language & prose- well everything. through the speaker's eyes i see how much they adore their muse, and it makes me compelled to hold those feelings for them as well. this poem is just the epitome of what it means to have a muse. all of this passion and longing and genuine care just makes my heart flutter... just wow. i genuinely can't express how beautiful this is!!
<3 Thank you for such kind reviews as always, feels as if the suns rays have rained upon me everytime I read your words!! I'm so glad the dancing of the words could bring the same emotions of adoration that my muses have done for me!!