She's the kind of girl who has this messy mind. Lot of what ifs, whys, wheres, when, how come, wherefores, and what for. She keeps scrutinizing everything just to fathom what's behind those questions.
At the back of her mind, everything was clear but still she doesn't want to accept these point of views simply because she got hurt too much before and she thinks that denying the truth shall prevent herself from hurting again.
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Hey, Sammy here. This was very emotional for me (even though I am a bit emotional most of the time) and I like how you portrayed that she knows she's in a messy situation, but she doesn't want to know the truth. There really isn't much to criticize (or maybe I'm just horrible at reviews) although the "Lot" should be "Lots of what ifs, whys, wheres, when, how come, wherefores, and what for." That sentence was a bit confusing (I had no idea "wherefores" was a word until now. XD), but I can see the message you're trying to point out. Anyway, this was very great to read and I wish you best of luck in the near by future!
This personal account is really emotional and touching. All of us go through this phase at some point in our lives and it is important to move ahead without looking back. Just a little thing that I would like to point out: In the second sentence you put many phrases in singular while the rest were in plural. ( when, how come, what for)
"Lot of what ifs, whys, wheres, when, how come, wherefores, and what for"
Happy writing
haha sorry and thanks.
This is amazing! I myself am self-described a rebel. I like the color orange. My mind definitely needs to go through the MOM machine--the Mechanic Obliterator of Messes. I also think the upside-down girl symbolizes a lot in this work. Congratulations, this was great!
Than you so much. I'm so speechless. Thank you again!!
Very very nice. I like how you leave more to interpretation than to a drawn-out explanation of whatever point you are trying to make. Even I'm going to have to analyze this to a certain extent. This has much in common with an inkblot. People are allowed to see what they wish to see. What I see is a girl who was very hurt. Hurt how? I don't know. I don't want to know. She knows she has to face the truth. She wants to face the truth. However the pain she is feeling is heart-wrenching. Facing it hurts. Not facing it hurts. But she asks herself this: Which hurts worse? Which will have a better outcome?
I have to say that I can't really find anything to offer a critique on. I know that this was meant for women, but even as a guy, I found this very moving.
Thank you so much! I was deeply flattered. Thank you omg
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