No, not too much but I shall go through and make grammar and sentence structure suggestions -
The Turner family lived on top of Cravesville Hill in the small town of Drune. They moved from Romania eighty years ago ,[There's a space before this comma that shouldn't be there.] after Kendall's parents passed on. She now lives with her Uncle Jack and Aunt Carly[s]. Now living[/s] in America where everyone is nosy. The family have to keep their secret hidden - they're vampires. They have been living off of subsitue [I think you mean substituted?] blood for as long as they can remember but they now have cravings for real blood.
Kendall, at sixteen, is forced to go to school. When she meets Oliver, he finds out her secret. Now as her past comes back to haunt her, she has to protect her family, herself and now Oliver. Urges grow stronger, time is running out, and her history paper is due at the end of the month. Can she save her family's dark secret, Oliver, and still pass high school?
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Other than that though, it sounds like it would make a pretty good story.
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