The Prettiest Girl In The World

This is a very sweet poem. It shows charisma. Minor flaws. But overall, great work.
Don't stop.

Thanks!

nekros wrote:I know the prettiest girl in the world!
Every upward glance,
Is a look into a shining lense.
And all of the sudden,
I find myself falling
into the canyon underneath. Watch out for annoying double spaces!

I might get caught in the currents
of it's herglowing river. seeing as you are talking about a girl
But if that's drowning,
I'd gladly do it again and again.

I know the prettiest girl in the world!
There isn't a sky in sight, I don't quite understand this line... perhaps you could reword it?
but I see a deep blue
as if the ocean were raging
within a wave of black vines. Lovely imagery.

I could just imagine,
a bluebird moving from branch to branch.
The motion itself
like swirling among flames.

I know the prettiest girl in the world!
Her hand is like a rose
whose thorns send shivers through my hands,
but the sight of the flower above
is sweeter than a taste of strawberry.

You can be sure
that the flavor sparks an eruption
as if the surface of the sun
were buried in my chest!

I know the prettiest girl in the world!

nekros wrote:I know the prettiest girl in the world!
Every upward glance,
Is a look into a shining lense.
And all of the sudden,
I find myself falling
into the canyon underneath.

I might get caught in the currents
of it's glowing river.
But if that's drowning,
I'd gladly do it again and again.

I know the prettiest girl in the world!
There isn't a sky in sight,
but I see a deep blue
as if the ocean were raging
within a wave of black vines.

I could just imagine,
a bluebird moving from branch to branch.
The motion itself
like swirling among flames.

I know the prettiest girl in the world!
Her hand is like a rose
whose thorns send shivers through my hands,
but the sight of the flower above
is sweeter than a taste of strawberry.

You can be sure
that the flavor sparks an eruption
as if the surface of the sun
were buried in my chest!

I know the prettiest girl in the world!(I get what you're saying. Good job!)