Young Writers Society

Hi Mahira!

I am here to give a quick review to your Kavita. Your poem has got a very smooth flow and reading through each line makes you wonder on the in-depth meaning of each one. Reading a hindi poetry always gives a pleasure and I'm glad you are posting it here on YWS. I was reading it again and again because of how beautiful it felt.

जो दिलों को भेद दें,
उन सरहदों को मिटा दो।

अपनी दहकती हुई आग से,
मोहब्बत-ए-शम्मा जला दो।

Hello there,

I can't speak this language, so Google Translate will be used. Let's begin.

I got a really butchered poem from Google, i doubt that's what you wanted. Some of the lines are quite good when I take a minute to look into them. Don't worry though, it's not you fault. it's just my poor skills in everything.

Also, poems should be broken into stanzas to make them clear. A block of words is unappetizing for some reviewers. In English, there would be some need of punctuation or something, but this is different, so I don't know.

I hope you understand what I mean with format.
Have a good day,
Haley.

Hi Nanda,
It took me 15 min to read the whole thing.
Actually hindi is my 3rd language,so i am a little slow in reading...
I hope u understand...
Well as hindi is my 3rd lang I couldnt understand certain lines...but yess i can atleast understand that you are a great writer.
I think that you are more strong in hindi than in english.
Well,my mother tongue is bengali but I cannot write so good as you...
"जो दिलों को भेद दें,

उन सरहदों को मिटा दो।"
I loved this line .
As i am not so good in hindi ...i cannot review any more..but i can bet this is a wonderful poem.


Keep writing.
from Sulagna