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Hey Momo!

RandomTalks here with a short review!

I really loved how you conveyed such an important and valuable lesson through such simple text. It was short and direct and you get straight to the point without lingering on descriptions or anything else really. I think it highlights the message of the analogy. You help others when they are in need, period. There are no 'buts', no 'ifs'. It is a simple fact, and you should stick to it lest you face the day when you are the one in need and the world simply walks by, ignoring any predicament you might find yourself in. Karma, I suppose finds a way to get back to you.

I am not used to reading such short pieces, but I don't think it would have the meaning if it was lengthened to fit more text that does not really go with the context. I am glad with your decision to keep it short. I love the slight satire you included with the thought "Surely my friend will help me!" It was not only ironical considering his actions of the previous night, but it also reflects the hypocrisy and the double standards of the world.

Overall, I really liked reading this. I guess it is true what they say, a friend in need's a friend indeed!

Keep up the good work and have a great day!

Hi MomoMajesty,

Mailice here with a short review!

You wrote a great analogy. It fits very much into today's times, in that unlike the ones I learnt at school, you've populated it with a relatable plot that everyone can experience for themselves (flat tyre, invitation to the party...).

I especially like the fact that the story is short and crisp. You get straight to the point and it's understandable to everyone who reads it, which is what an analogy is all about. Stylistically, I think it's very good that you've divided the text into several sections, which could all be given a title. To analyse it is also very good, because you can clearly see how happiness turns against the man the further you read.
As you shout into the woods, so it echoes back out says a german proverb. You have transposed this well into the text. I would argue that the moral is that if you want something, you have to start doing something yourself - in this case, help. One is treated like one has treated somebody else.

The ending turned out great, when the friend tells him that he didn't help him, because the man didn't help the friend beforehand. It's a different kind of morality that is shown here, as you get it from other analogies. Perhaps it is a little too strict here, at least that was my first impression when I read it.

His friend said simply, "Because you did not help me!"

Surely my friend will help me! he thought.

Gosh. I'm not entirely sure what the moral is... help those in need or you will lack it when you need it? Be nice or you'll experience karma?
Or, considering the title, "Help your friend do their homework or you'll have none when you do yours?"
Eh, something along those lines.

Is it, "Tit for tat ain't all bad"

As a short story/whatever it is, it's quite nice. The idea of helping those in need isn't entirely original for moral stories, but it isn't too often that those stories are written with the modern perspective of cars, parties and annoyed friends.

"Someone else will help him," he told himself.

His friend said simply, "Because you did not help me!"

See if you can guess the moral!