Published May 24, 2007
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Hey Meevs. I think I'll push on to the end of what you have on here now.
This Chapter seemed familiar to my, and then I remembered that this one is where I actually started the story. xD Then to number 1... My mind doesn't use that much logic.
was being bought up to be quite the little gentleman.
Should that be brought up? I'm not quite sure.
Anyway, on to the next, I need to find out if Chris is there! xD
i enjoyed this, only I havent read the rest of the story so it makes no sense. But it was a good chapter 30!
HeHe, JC!!! It's an English thing 'Cor'. Kinda like an exclamation.
Ok, Meevs, I liked this and I liked the way it led onto Rob. It made the whole chapter make a bit more sense and tied the loose ends together.
One thing:
Just a tiny typo...should be 'me'.
Keep it up!!
Alainna
xxxxxxx
One- Who is Cor?
Two- This didn't make much sense, he say's "you have natural curls" But he's talking to Jaimy's mom, but holding Jaimy's hair.
Your characters are developing nicely, as always. I like how you're adding some of Jaimy's past into the story, it really helps the reader understand. Keep up the good work Meeves.
-JC