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Hi. My name's Ari, and I'll be your reviewer today.

This is a pretty crazy song, but it makes perfect sense when i sing it in my head. Nice Work!

Anyway, onto nitpicks!

All spelling errors/things you needed are in RED All comments are in BLUE

Broken Always make the title bigger than the song, otherwise it looks like the first verse.

I want to know when

Your clock will stop

You need to see

The pain that you have caused

I'm so far away

From where I used to be

Standing alone,

Under the knife point

Darkness creeping slowly from the edge

Chorus

You were meant to be the one (were meant to be the one)

To help me off the ground

But all I could see is you running

I have never felt so cold

Have never been so dull

It’s funny now it’s so clear

You’re gone

End Chorus

My heart was hanging

By a lonely thread

It’s all your fault

For stabbing me this way

I wish I had killed you

On the first date

But you got away

And ran with my whole heart

Darkness is creeping from the edge

Begin Chorus

You were meant to be the one (were meant to be the one)

To help me off the ground

But all I could see is you running

I have never felt so cold

Have never been so dull

It’s funny now it’s so clear

You’re gone

End Chorus

You made me drown

In my own blood

I want to see

You on your knees

I will be unfair

Till this game ends

You gave me death

So I’ll feed you meth What the heck? Did you mean something other than this?

Darkness creeping from the edges

Begin Chorus

You were meant to be the one (were meant to be the one)

To help me off the ground

But all I could see is you running

I have never felt so cold

Have never been so dull

It’s funny now it’s so clear

You’re gone

End Chorus

So I’ll feed you meth