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Tara Sanders confidently walked through the halls of Laybreeze Prepatory school in laybreeze, North Carolina. Stopping only at her locker to retrieve her books for her first class where she was confronted by Lily Shorter, A petite freshman. Not in the mood to talk Tara closed her locker “ Hi Lily ”. Tara exclaimed with false cheerfulness in her voice , not that anyone could tell. Short haired girl smiled “ welcome back Tara ”. It was the first day of school and everyone was calmly getting cached up with there very much missed friends. Tara flashed a quick smile and was about to walk of when she was almost blinded by the amount of energy this small girl gave off. She was obviously happy. Lily touched her shoulder lightly “ you ok ”? She managed a nod but the truth was that she was filled with a sudden urge to breathe in deeply . That how most werewolves got power or strength. Yes, the small animals they ate satisfied them but energy……… real human energy was better than any animal. Tara jerked her shoulder away with one swift movement and headed down the hall to anywhere where such a small girl had such a huge control over her. Then , suddenly out of the corner of her eye she caught a glint of sunlight . Or rather hair……..very familiar hair.
Logan? She breathed knowing he couldn’t hear her telepathically . Only bonded pairs could do that. “hey babe I - ” but he didn’t get to finish because in almost unconscious Tara fell into his waiting arms.
OKay, so we've got an interesting start here, definitely leaves you with quite a few things to think about this one. We get the sense that there's a bit of hidden world situation going on here with all these talks of werewolves and hints at the fact that our protagonist and the Logan person mentioned afterwards are not really humans.
At any rate, this definitely got my attention rather quickly with those little hints, despite a relatively slow start with conversation there. The description of the girl here is done quite well and you can quickly gauge the general personality of our main character from the way they act with said girl. One thing I will say is that you can simply show her reacting to the girl, rather than sort of telling us the whole 'this is how I react" thing cause it just seems like an unnecessary addition. The cliffhanger towards the end was pretty well executed, and I think it does make you want to continue reading this story and find out more here.
Overall, this is a pretty solid start to a story here, it seems like something I'd read at any rate.
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
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