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I really like how this captures what it is like to be a writer. It is really relatable and well put together which is what makes this really good. The rhyming and the formatting just add to it. I also really like how you describe what's going on and how in depth it is even if it's subtle. Really good

Hey! This isn't a review. Just wanted to drop by and say that I loved this. Quite painfully accurate to my own writing process and motives for writing. I like your word choice and second person worked great for the tone and message. I really enjoyed this. Thanks for sharing

Hello and greeting to you! Kind of a belated welcome, but just thought I'd say it anyway:
Welcome to YWS! Hope you enjoy it here!
Anyway, as for my critiques, I don't have many, as this is well written and has a nice plot as well. Since everyone has different writing styles and I write a lot different then this, it was fun reading about someone else's experiences! The author's struggle to write was real and is totally relatable to any writer. Hmm...maybe you have to be a writer to fully appreciate this poem? Well, I know I certainly liked this.

You drink a bit more to air out your head.

Hi there, midnight-thoughts! I see you just joined YWS today, so welcome to the site. <3

This poem perfectly captures what it's like to be a writer. Everyone's version of the writing experience is a little different, so I usually only relate to some of the poem. Your poem, on the other hand, was something I related to the entire way through!

The occasional rhymes are part of the reason why your poem is so good, but the formatting also really helps. You did a great job breaking down the writing experience into little tiny moments. They were basically snapshots of a bigger scene. As someone who struggles to read through long blocks of text, it was definitely helpful.

This isn't really a critique, but I thought you might be interested in knowing another way to format the poem. Formatting on YWS can be a little weird sometimes. If you want to make the spaces between lines smaller, all you have to do is hit shift & enter at the same time. You can use the regular enter for stanza breaks instead of periods in between stanzas - it's how I format my poems.

Besides that, your poem looks great! I think part of the reason I love it so much is because you touch on something I've always believed about my own writing - my desire and inspiration to write come from my own negative experiences. They can come from positive ones, too, but the negative ones are the initial inspiration.

There's actually something called the Literary Spotlight on the front page of YWS that a work can get into if it gets enough likes in a small period of time. I hope this poem ends up there! It certainly deserves to.

Let me know if you have any questions about this review or the site in general!

I'm not the best at reviewing poetry, but I'll just share my take on this and my suggestions!

Ding!

You've finally grasped it.

As you race to your desk to write it,

It floats away, timidly.

You sit in your chair, hands pulling hair, feet stomping floor,

Your candlelit mind burning no more.

You drink a bit more to air out your head.

You crawl back to bed, hoping your words

Won't leave you on "read".

As you breathe a few times to clear out your mind,

Tiny spark. Wake up now!

You've just found your new idea.

You jump up and pace back and forth in your room

To feed it. Expand it. Before it is doomed

To your attention span, stunted.

Yes, you've got it! It is glorious.

It is clever and deep and miraculous.

Thrilled, you sit down,

Ready to record. To perform. To create.

Because you were always

Better at writing than talking.

Better at thinking than doing.

Better at feeling than interpreting...

So!

You seat yourself and begin to compose.

You search fancy words to make art out of prose.

Your expressions are soulful, like marvelous shows.

As you pen the next letter, you channel your woes

Into the last line,

And then break everything.

Oops. I've been caught.

Hi, it's me, your pain,

Come to torment you again.

You must have known inspiration doesn't come from thin air.

So go on, write your verse. At least this you can rehearse.

Like all the scenes you play at night.

Every word that comes out right.

A simple end to every fight.

Every solution to each plight.

Go on then, creator.

Craft your perfection,

The one you failed to build out there:

A slightly better-chosen word,

One or two "I love you more".

This was a little confusing. I felt like the rhythm was off and you could've used some other words instead like 'Build' for 'Craft' or 'crafted' for 'chosen'. The last line also confused me here too. I'm not sure what it's supposed to mean.

You lean back in your chair, dazed at the turn of events.

Like ink, your past is set,

But at least your writing's yours to shape.