Published March 2, 2007
There's not always someone
To take your call
There's not always someone
To catch you when you fall
You have no harness
No safety net below
Take the plunge
And take a chance
Chorus:
A risk that we must take
Decisions we must make
Keep going there's no break
No more hesitation
Risks make us strong
Mistakes don't make us wrong
Don't give in when you hope is gone
Just keep going on and on..
END OF CHORUS
Life is bittersweet
we laugh and we weep
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CHORUS
Wrongs can make a right
Single candle will give you light
When nights are dark you can make them bright
Can't draw back, don't surrender now
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Overall, it was pretty good, and broken-image had some good critiques. I just wanna add that "Is it life?" doesn't seem like the question that makes the most sense there. Perhaps "Is it right?" would make more sense. Or come up with your own alternative. But as is, the chorus is confusing. The idea behind the song is good, though. Keep it up!
i think you should take out the word 'that'.
that does not make a lot of sense to me you need to make it more clear, it sounds forced.
i really like this and shall add it to my notebook of inspiring quotes lol; if you don't mind me doing so.
i think you left the first line unfinished. write something like "when you try you earn them" or use your own ideas but i think it needs to be re-written.
well the first line is great however here is what i also think.
write 'a' single candle...
erm well you start of with saying you have to fight, than surrender; and than you say fight.
make up your mind
anyway it doesn't sound right unless i have interpreted it wrong!
overall its cool and i love the point behind it.
so yeah im going to shut up now.
cheers