A breath without a life

by melvinbanggollay

  • Poetry
  • Lyrical

Published December 3, 2009

A BREATH WITHOUT A LIFEMelvin Banggollay


We need to breath to live,
to see the the birds to fly
To feel the wind to leave.
To let our dreams go by
but when we love no more
and heart's closed its door,
We breath without a life,
No joy to heal life's strife.

We need to love and care
And show the joy of life
to those who need a cheer,
To those who lived in strife,
To those who need a care,
and hungered a love's nest.
Hence, we must share our best
as we seek our own life's quests.

MELVIN BANGGOLLAY

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EL FINITO
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EL FINITO wrote a review Review · Dec 3, 2009

Good poem you are creative

melvinbanggollay wrote:A BREATH WITHOUT A LIFEMelvin Banggollay


We need to breath to live,
to see the birds fly
To feel the wind as it leaves.
To let our dreams go by
but when we love no more
and heart's door closes,
We breath without life,
No joy to heal life's strife.

We need to love and care
And show the joy of life
to those who need a glee,
To those who lived in strife,
To those who need care,
and hungered a love's nest.
Hence, we must share our best
as we seek our own life's quests.

MELVIN BANGGOLLAY


Some corrections were made in the above version. Be careful with your typing next time and try to proof read before posting

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LiveScreamWriting
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LiveScreamWriting wrote a review Review · Dec 3, 2009

That's so incredibly BEAUTIFUL! :D The way it rhymes and flows, it's just perfect. I wouldn't change a single thing if I were you. :)

-Ellie :elephant:



It's like everyone tells a story about themselves inside their own head. Always. All the time. That story makes you what you are. We build ourselves out of that story.
— Patrick Rothfuss, The Name of the Wind