This is gorgeous. Truly. The struggle of inner demons vs. what's socially acceptable is really beautiful.
Onto the review:
The last stanza loses me a bit. The prior stanzas are told from decided experience, but the last stanza seems like it's been decided before the experience. I just lose a bit of the "speaking from experience" part of the poem there. Especially in the phrase "could only cause trouble." If the narrator was speaking from experience, wouldn't it make a but more sense to say "will only cause trouble"? That way, the reader knows that the narrator has done it before and knows what it will cause, instead of only what it could cause. Just my two cents.
Overall, beautiful job, and bravo!
Points: 73
Reviews: 30
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