Hi! Pomp here for a quick review!
I'm supposed to be dissecting this same play for a test tomorrow, I'll have you know. So I'm tackling this as a revision of sorts (forgive me if I ramble).
I guess the one thing that bothered me a bit about this was that it's pretty fast and while it gives you a general gist of what the actual play was about, I think it could've been slightly more of a comical/overblown representation of the real thing. It wasn't as engaging as it could be, and for someone who's never read the play/seen it on-stage or on-screen before, it might prove a bit difficult to understand and keep up with.
I was also a tad disappointed that the mechanicals' play-within-the-play was only worthy of one tweet; I mean, it was it was one of the highlights of the play--pure comedic /gold/--as well as Shakespeare jibing at the country bumpkins for their lack of theatrical talent, o'course. because he's clever that way. 
The to-and-fro between the audience and the play was also one of the parts that would've incredible in tweet form, like when Theseus says in the last act that Moonshine and Lion are left to bury the dead (and Demetrius adds that the wall is, too). Seeing Bottom's 'LOL, nu wey, wall is down' response to that would've been epic.
''Now it's time for a play about love through a wall'' is also a bit random, seeing as I think Bottom would've been more ... verbose about what exactly they hope to do, and I somehow picture him tagging Quince and Crew with the utmost gusto until he runs out of space for characters.... >.>
Anywhoo, these are all suggestions--just some parts of the play that I'd've killed to see in tweet form. Another thing--it'd be nice if subtle references were made, like a character randomly asking, ''how on earth is there wi-fi in a forest?'' Or, you know, you could even put a modern twist on it and have them meet up in actual places, which I think would be an immense lot of fun to read about.
I missed the hilarious love-potion induced romance between Titania and Bottom and Hermia and Helena's quarrel--''and though she be but little, she is fierce'' is one of my favouritest lines evur--was lacking. When Helena questions what the mist is, it's a tad too blatant, and it also cuts the argument short. Nuuuu. </3 OH, and another thing:
THE DUEL WHERE IS THE DUEL THAT NEVER REALLY HAPPENED BUT ANYWAY THINGS WERE SO DRAMATIC AND FUNNY DURING THAT PARTICULAR PORTION OF THE PLAY--uhm.
So, yes. I'd like to add that to the list-of-things-I'd-like-to-see-in-tweet-form please.
Quick nitpick: Twitter-Bottom says, ''my head is a donkey's'', but in the play he was never aware of this! It was actually a very interesting form of dramatic irony, and the amount of puns he obliviously made was funny, too. (''You see an ass-head of your own, do you?'' XDD)
I did like the ending, but, like most of the piece, it was a little abrupt. I'm aware this isn't meant to be a serious piece, but even if it's a crash-course of what happened in MSND, it doesn't have the entirety of the elements. Besides that--I liked it! It would've been nice to see the contrast between language used between the classes, like Theseus and Oberon/the rest of the Athenian higher-ups being absolute snobs and typing things out properly, and with Hermia occasionally swearing (*gasp* how unladylike!), while Bottom/the mechanicals use an inordinate amount of chatspeak. I dunno. I think it would've been representative of Shakespeare's pattern throughout the play, but I was quite fond of this piece regardless!
Overall, this was lovely! A very late welcome to YWS and I'd like to see more of your work soon~
Keep writing! Keep it up! PM me if you have any questions~
Cheers
~Pomp c:
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