Published October 7, 2012
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I think this has a lot of potential to it. This is how I feel about my boyfriend. Why did you let him go? Was it meant to be short and sweet? What was the deepest secret that makes us care? Is he the one?
I loved that. It was beautiful, and well put together. =) Well done.
Awwww {<3}
that you love.
I want to tell you that I'm a very dramatic person and this almost made me cry! Haha!
I was NOT expecting that ending
But that's what I like!
This isn't one of those sterotipical love story things, it's dramtic and heart felt. It reaches out to people who have lost someone speical, in a way where it's hard to see them every day walking without you. Living with out you. It's pretty dang sad...
I can feel your emotions as you wrote this poem, and I love the title and format.
He's the boy... He's THAT boy
And no matter what happens, you always will even when they drift so far away from you...
You captured your feelings using very simply, which I know is not an easy feat when you really like a boy! I really liked the ending- it was unexpected, and it was neither too abrupt nor too in depth- you didn't dwell on it, which added to the effect!
Never stop writing!