Hi marms! I enjoyed reading this poem, and I have just a few notes to cover.
First,
going on new adventures without the company of each other
this feels kind of longish and wordy, so maybe you could say "without each other's company".
Second,
i would cast off back to you if i knew where to look
did you purposely leave out the 'i' (bolded)? Also, I was a little confused at first when I read the "cast off back to you" part, though I'm not sure what to suggest for that, since it might have just been me.
And that's all I have, since I'm not really a poetry expert! Keep at it, and I hope this helped!
~Lael
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