Hello!
RandomTalks here with a short review!
This was an interesting start to the story. I wish you had added more background as the sudden mention of an attack in the very beginning of the story came across as a little abrupt and random. It was an interesting hook to reel your readers in, but it must have enough content to actually engage the readers in your story.
Right now, this is too short and does not have any substantial content to actually keep the readers invested. It is more like a short opening that establishes the setting of your story - the actual story seems to be missing. You need characters that the readers can relate with, you need dialogues and stories that we can emotionally connect with. Right now, the story does not have any of those things and as a result, it feels a little empty, like the bare shell of a something better.
A tiny nitpick:
The fire was burning on dead bodies and the ash was the parts of people who had been to close to the missile.
Here, the word will be 'too' and not 'to' in the first instance. The sentence will be: "The fire was burning on dead bodies and the ash was the parts of people who had been too close to the missile."
This definitely has the potential to become something really great. Right now, I can see the story going in so many directions - you have the basis for a war here, and politics and drama. Those are all ingredients of an incredibly entertaining story so I cannot wait to see what you do with this. However, at the moment you have enough to intrigue the readers, but not enough to really leave an impact on them through your story.
That's all!
Keep writing and have a great day!
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