the way that we all look at each other with some love or maybe a bit of hate
either way we all the same hating on one another not looking at the big picture
the world is falling apart yet all we do is sit here and do what we do
smoke a blunt at least maybe two
tweak on the words that find their way out our mouths
just flowing to some shit that's been in our heads
cant even stop cause i've gone to far
Chicago is where me and them be at riding around Albany park
that's where we live and plan to keep growing up
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hello
I WANT MORE 
lol
first of all.
i reeeeeeaallly like what you have so far it has some meaning.
but i personally think you have just scratched the surface , you could
write more versus or add in a chorus as said above with a bit of research.
or if you want the lyrics to be more personal to the area you live in/ the people you know
just (this is going to sound cheesy) step back , write a few notes to yourself based on what you see around you, things that you read in the news, things you see on tv news etc etc and hopefully more ideas will start to flow
i like what you have so far though
x good luck...but most of all......HAVE FUN WRITING IT
Hello I am going to review you.
First of all.
The way you have set it out isn't really like lyrics are usually set out. They usually are short lines cut into verses, and a chorus. Sometimes a bridge aswell. And speaking on those terms, your lyrics are very short for general lyrics, as in, theres no way you could make a whole song out of it.
But having said that the content is good, you just need to expand. Putting your main point in the chorus, and finding something to die down the song with. What I do if I don't have enough content is, I either research it more and find more content, or I just put the chorus more than once.
But having said all that, you don't need a chorus or a bridge, most of the killers songs don't have any of it, just verses, so it's entierly up to you. My idea would be just to expand, by researching
good though improve knowledge and will be excellent
good luck