Helloooo! My first and main comment on this is: WOW! There are dynamics about this that makes this so profound! First, I love the way it is structured. I can see why you shared the image to demonstrate that. Second, I love the call / response thing you have going on with lines like:
and every time she means it [please ignore the lonely sounds]
Third, there is SO much meat here to pound out! By "meat" I mean one of my favorite literary motifs: analogies/metaphors! I count at least 10. You have cold showers suggesting an awakening as they "bring out her eyes" whereas you have hot showers representing opposite and possibly symbolizing a number inner pain as they "burn the emptiness inside." You have tossing flowers in the street compared to roadkill. This could be interpreted as symbolization of the lack of value placed on the writer. You have the asphalt's description and its harshness being comparable to life's challenges and the weight of this pain. You have the ceiling fan line (personal favorite). There's repetitiveness here, perhaps in life, in her being, and the desire to break free or be valued. You have adoration compared to an investment. In most transactions related to money or investments, there's an exchange and give/take. This prompts reflection on the reciprocity of the relationship and how the writer's discarded. There's also the grayscale sunflower (another !!! moment for me). Sunflowers, my favorite flower, are often bright yellow. They're known for following the sun and bringing vibrancy to fall. This analogy signifies and could represent a lose of that vibrancy possibly due to the emotional struggles described here. I found it interesting that you used the word "son" instead of "sun." I wonder if this is a double entendre with the double meaning referring to the sun in the sky or the ultimate light and the religious ultimate light (Son). I noted the smiling imagery contrasts with tossing flowers in the street. This visualization and motif heightens the characteristics here. Lastly, the ending line:
. I wonder if this suggests that the writer has no qualms about being vulnerable, and if she longs for understanding and compassion. I also find the use of pronouns intriguing. There is reference to "you" who often receives questioning and harsh skepticism. There is "she" who at first is described and treated like "trash", but then when "he" comes in, she is a "lovely sight." The use of pronouns in this allowed me to interpret this as a friendship gone wrong or possibly an ex-boyfriend. The "she" is in a new relationship that is healthy and where she is treated well. She may be reflecting on the past and has questions. Why won't "you" do the same? That line really sold that for me, but I could be not understanding fully or misinterpreting. Either way, this was a great read! Very inspiring! Wishing you well wherever you are in the world.Her fragility is no secret
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