Published January 16, 2009
I love the way that I can't look away
When you turn, your slender face gleams in the light
Your pale white skin glowing at the beach
Your rough hands twirling my hair
Then I look into your eyes and I realize
That your the one Ive always wanted
The him, the it, the mine....
Even as I sit here now
Talking to you face to face
You don't seem to get that I want you that way.
When I see you looking at her
Wondering why she won't take you
I understand that I will only be your best friend
Nothing more to you.
Your still my him, my it, and your mine...
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Wao. Good. In the beginning it reminds me of twilight, with the skin gleaming in the sun and the pale white face. O_o
hehe sorry.
So yeah. That is all I really wanted to say, I guess . . . I like how it is sad in the end. Boo hoo. Nice work!
Post more stuff, man! Jees.
One word girl, Wow. I love your depth to it! It is wow. I love it! Your so expressive and neat! PM ME!
Wow. I think that this is a really sweet poem, but you know what would make this poem a gazillion times better? If you added on. I can tell that the girl really loves the guy, but you don't get the extent of her feelings for him! I think that it would be ten times more powerful if you added on!
Please PM me if you do! I would really like to read more!