I loved this poem and how you used imagery to your advantage. The work has a very nice flow all throughout and utilizes amazing vocabulary.
The first stanza was an incredible introduction to the piece. Furthermore, the line “I belong everywhere and nowhere” feels very real, which gives it a nice ‘human touch,’ if that makes any sense.
Later in the poem, in the line “While uncertainty fills my lungs,” I am slightly confused on what’s you are trying to say. How exactly is uncertainty filling your lungs rather than your brain?
The last stanza had beautiful imagery throughout and an amazing and thought-provoking ending. But, one thing I am wondering is if you meant to have a rhyme scheme; the first stanza has a rhyme scheme (at least in how I pronounce those words), but none of the other stanzas do. Did you give up on the rhyme scheme half-way through or did it never have one in the first place?
Overall, this was a beautiful poem. Have a nice day and keep writing!
Points: 149
Reviews: 10
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