Greetings!!!!
Hello, I am B, And I saw this, with the unique name.
First off, Welcome to YWS!!! I hope that you like it!!! If you ever need any help at all, feel free to message me!!!
What I liked
I thought that you showed the idea of being paranoid to perfection!! You did very well,and I loved that you showed details into it...
Kinda confused... about...
1.)
"Do you ever feel like you're being watched?
Like, your every move."
Like your every move.....what? I got a little lost. I would have added like...
If your every move you felt eyes on you or something......
2.)
"Something is always in your presence.
You feel a figure, constantly standing behind you, waiting.
Waiting for what? Death? An opportunity?
~Lauren ... 1:15, Tuesday, November 6"
Why was this date, name and number on there?? What that when you wrote it? IF it is, do really dont need to put that there, we can see it....
Overall, I loved this! It was pretty great!!!!
I hope this wasnt too much!
keep writing,
~B.
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